Oh what is this immersive, super vivid masterpiece? 👀 (I know it may sound crazy but) I absolutely loved that she took a dagger to the chest from him. I can't wait to find out what happens next ❤️
The descriptions here felt like I was literally in some magical world. I understood Caspian-- how he needed to do this to get the crown, how he would stop at nothing. And then her death sort of broke me. His desperation. His fear.
Oof I loved the description of the blood the part where he was describing how he liked the way it felt just stayed with me. I was enraptured throughout the whole thing could not look away it was so immersive I was living in this world with them. That cliffhanger is rude I mean she probably lives but how dare you keep me waiting to actually know. I need more 🥲
This is actually so good my mind can’t comprehend how someone can be so vivid and descriptive and just good at writing. Also, side note, my dog’s name is kaspian lolll
Oh what is this immersive, super vivid masterpiece? 👀 (I know it may sound crazy but) I absolutely loved that she took a dagger to the chest from him. I can't wait to find out what happens next ❤️
Thank youuu! 🤍
Dude had to stab her to death to start caring. Standard.
I saw you posted this, but haven't had the time to read. I will leave a comment as soon as I do
Loved this. The voice was electric, every detail alive on the page. And that shift? From disinterest to devastation? Flawless.
Switching to the FMC in part 2 👀
I was hoping you would say that.
Thank YOU! Pretty sure this whole thing is pure divine inspiration. And I really love it, so I cannot wait to have your opinion on the rest!
The voice was killer. Curious to see if you do an FMC POV or stick to the MMC.
Wow. Just wow.
The descriptions here felt like I was literally in some magical world. I understood Caspian-- how he needed to do this to get the crown, how he would stop at nothing. And then her death sort of broke me. His desperation. His fear.
I NEED to know what happens next.
🥹 Yay!!
When the inspiration came for this part I got really excited and hoped it would work well. Set the world and emotional stakes immediately.
Part 2 switches to Asteria, right where we leave things here.
Oooo I can’t wait!
Oof I loved the description of the blood the part where he was describing how he liked the way it felt just stayed with me. I was enraptured throughout the whole thing could not look away it was so immersive I was living in this world with them. That cliffhanger is rude I mean she probably lives but how dare you keep me waiting to actually know. I need more 🥲
This is actually so good my mind can’t comprehend how someone can be so vivid and descriptive and just good at writing. Also, side note, my dog’s name is kaspian lolll